Jab rooh bojhal ho aati hai
Aankhein ho padti hai num,
Jo tum nahi toh kis se bhala
Kahengey dil ki baatein hum?
Jab uljhan mein hota hai mann
Jab karwat leti hai dhadkan,
Jo tum nahi toh kis se bhala
Kahengey dil ki baatein hum?
Jab dimag hota hai bechain
Jab uski dil se hoti hain anban,
Jo tum nahi toh kis se bhala
Kahengey dil ki baatein hum?
Jab tark shakti pe parda sa chhaye
Jab khud se khud ko ho uljhan,
Jo tum nahi toh kis se bhala
Kahengey dil ki baatein hum?
6 comments:
really nice......i hope d person u ve written dis for has seen it already n believe me he ll consider himself to be lucky to hv a frnd like u...... :)
God bless u.......keep writing :)
antar-bhavo aur saral shabdon k khubsurat prayog se kavyatri(lekhika) ne apne jatil chhano(moments) ko ek khubsurat nazm ki shakl di hai..jise suro aur saazo ka saath mile toh ek umda ghazal ban jaayegi, isme ki shaq nahin hai..Well, really well written Sutapa..Ek sachche dil se nikli aawaz...Abhinav
I agree with abhinav more..Its not a poem,instead its a nazm.which means its very near to a song. you have written a song! congrats! Its really nice..
@ Atanu: No..he hasnt. He is probably the only person who doesn't even have a clue!
@ Abhinav: Videshi shadon ka gyan humein thoda kam hai isliye aapke bhawnao ki main kadr karti hoon. Thanks for the compliment!
@ Nilanjan: I don't really know what to say! Apart from the fact that it wasn't a very conscious effort..happened just naturally!
yes,part timers who are literati's are like that!
@ Nilanjan: maney?
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